Bk1: Ch2: Pg25
Zenlan: Hey everyone! The rain has stopped!!
1b.
Maeye {thought]: Geez, Zen. Nice block...
Maeye {thought]: Fucker.
2a.
Gus: Thn we leave at first light.
Arayanna: Agreed.
2b.
Maeye: That was such an amazing story. Maybe someday you could give me more of the details so I can write a song about you and Dunverys and your epic battles across distant worlds.
Arayanna: You write songs?
Maeye: Of course. And I sing. Dare I call myself a true Festiv if I did not?
Arayanna: I would love to hear you sing someday.
Maeye: Well then...
3a.
Maeye: Zenlan, mind if I use this?
Zenlan: Of course not. Be my guest, lass.
3b.
Maeye: Alright. Make yourself confortable.
4.
Maeye:
Hya stood on the cliff so high
As the setting sun turned red the sky
Below the ocean did crash and roll
But above her heart was dead and cold
She'd loved a man both strong and true
Their vows they swore would none undo
Yet Temp'iri too found her man fair
And called to him with salted air
And though his love for Hya was strong
No man could resist Temp'iri's song
So onto the dark sea he did sail
With promise to return whole and hale
But none is as jealous as Temp'iri
And never did he return from the sea
A year and a day her vigil she stood
The time had come to do what she would
Temp'iri had taken he love down low
Now into the sea Hya too would go
As fair Epsca rose into the sky
She heard poor Hya's mournful cries
So she looked into the woman's heart
And felt the pain that broke her apart
And too she saw the hand of her sister
Temp'iri the jealous, Temp'iri the trickster
This sadness touched our Epsca's soul
So this woman's heart she would make whole
Just as Hya began her final flight
She was stopped by a most wondrous sight
Someone approached from across the field
Beneath the moonlight were they revealed
Naked was this strange woman most fair
With skin like milk and midnight for hair
She spoke not a word as she did close
With eyes of gold and lips most rose
Gently the stranger led Hya away
From sea and vigil and heart's dismay
And though this woman was to her unknown
She led them both unto Hya's home
And finally the stranger did speak
"I know your heart and the death it does seek
So why not give it to me instead
And let me take you unto your bed"
"I could always kill myself on the morrow"
Thought Hya so lost in pain and sorrow
"So why not lie with this woman tonight
And tomorrow with death I will make my flight"
So all that night they shared love and tears
laughter, secrets, joys and fears
They shared themselves both body and mind
And in the morning Hya woke to find
Her stranger was gone and on her pillow
Rested a single blue moonwillow
And to her surprise Hya did feel
Her broken heart has begun to heal
And though she did return to the sea
Where she had planned her ending be
No more did she feel death in that place
But instead the warmth of Epsca's embrace.
5a.
Zenlan and Gus: Wonderful!! More! more!
Arayanna: That was absolutely beautiful. You have the voice of an angel.
Those are amazing lyrics you have written!!!! <3 And whoa Maeye!!! Watch out for your robe in that last panel π
Thank you!
I think Maeye would be just has happy standing there naked if propriety would allow. π
Agree with Shanasaur: would love to hear that turned into a real ballad, acoustic guitar if you can’t find a proper lutist π
Can picture Mae singing that with her eyes shut the whole time
Shana: more concerned about her legs/feet than her bath-robe
Oh and Mae dear? Zen saved you from making an embarrassment out of yourself, really doubt you would want to slip a hand under Aray’s robe in such a public place as that, specially with Gus and Ryder hovering nearby
I don’t think Maeye was going for a grope – she seemed to be working up to a kiss last page (something she might risk in public), but Zen has ruined the mood, and the moment is gone. But other moments may come…
Yea, she was going in for the smooch, and got blocked pro-style. There will definitely be more moments to come.
Hahaha I don’t doubt that Maeye will try again soon π and yes!!! Someone needs to turn that into a proper song!!!!!!!
Last page she was going for the smooch, but not where her right hand is in panel 1 (and Aray has her hand on Mae’s knee, so the groping would be mutual :P)
This is great! Hearing that turned into a ballad would be awesome.
Heya! Glad you found us over here! Welcome to the family!
Everyone, Scynge. Scynge, everyone.
Scynge is a friend from DA.
Welcome Scynge (is that pronounced like ‘singe’? or some weird way?)
Singe is correct, like the word meaning slightly burned
And thank you!
I have the tune in my head and I do play guitar. I will see if I can noodle it out. But I most definitely do not have the voice of an angel, so I will not be singing along. π
No slight meant, but good, something like this has to be sung perfectly or it won’t have the same impact π
Love the “ting ting ting” of the guitar! Aray looks completely entranced. Is festiv singing magical in some way?
Not in Maeye’s case, she’s just really good. Good question tho!
Couple of updates, friends. First, I have added a new god to our list of gods, Slo’Gha. Slo’Gha is a creepy old fellow who just happens to be the ruler of the afterlife. π Second, there is a new Cities page under the Prentil menu. Here I will outline all of major cities of our beloved isle. First up for you is the city of Stennar. More to follow soon!
Recently found the comic. Been enjoying it thus far. Keep up the good work, folks.
Glad you are enjoying it! Welcome!
Great comic J’m waiting for more.
Thank you! More coming soon!
the line “whole and hail” should be “whole and hale”, but otherwise fabulous lyrics! bravo!
Thank you! I will have to fix that. Glad you enjoyed it!
New reader diving the archives, read this page like four times today because of dat song. Wow π Also amused by how quickly these two are falling for each other π
I think I found a pair of errors, though: Shouldn’t the line “Temp’iri the jealous, Tempiri the trixter” be “Temp’iri the jealous, Temp’iri the trickster”?
I am glad you liked the song and thanks for pointing out the typo – I appreciate the help!
The romance is definitely accelerated, and this bothers me as a storyteller. You never want to give away too much too soon, and I want their relationship to be special, not just a cheap way to show of some nice lesbian T&A. But, the in-comic timeline is moving so much more slowly than the real life that I felt we needed to move quickly with their romance.
Never felt it to be rushed, some people do have an instant attraction, and, so far, in comic they haven’t done anything more than flirt and ‘testing the waters’ to see if the other responds in the same way
Cool – glad it does not feel rushed to you. It will be time for more than flirting soon, I think.
Hm. Well, if I saw two people falling for each other that fast in real life, I wouldn’t think anything of it β and, for that matter, Guesticus is right, I don’t think either has a clue how the other feels. (I’m going to dive the comic a few more times in the coming months, it’s kind of a blur right now O:)) Both falling fast is just more attention-grabbing because they’re the main-est characters, and we can see into their thoughts on both sides.
As an author, when I want to get two characters together quickly, I normally start the story with them already being friends/allies/worthy opponents/etc, and the beginning shakes up their relationship. That way, the rapid process is their relationship settling into a new patternβ¦ which really does tend to snowball. But, that’s after learning my lesson in high school O:)
(Another trick is timeskips, like chapter 4 already going at a page a day.)
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and ideas. π What do you write?
Mostly sci-fi/fantasy with xenofiction elements π I have some up with a webcomic-like structure here:
http://darekun.twilightparadox.com/cgi-bin/Comic.cgi
and some others here:
http://darekun.twilightparadox.com/Story/
Unfortunately, as the saying goes, most of writing is rewriting β when I can’t just go back and change things, I end up writing myself into corners. A “series bible” helps(Yay timeline!), but ultimately I’m just not serious enough about it. Beginnings are easy, though π
(Please forgive any textual errors, my keyboard is drying.)
“Anyway, here’s Wonderwall.”