Bk1: Ch6: Pg18
Nov26
Ack! Almost forgot to thank the great people at the Austria Anglo Alliance for the wonderful background image I used on this page!
Ack! Almost forgot to thank the great people at the Austria Anglo Alliance for the wonderful background image I used on this page!
i guess we wont be seeing Hudlin again…
btw… when Maeye said she is warm all the time, first thought was – it’s must be warm to sleep with her… and then Array says the same… š
may i guess, orcs have been somehow deceived or pushed to attack?!
i think Maeye and Array will have to sort this out… š
We will see a little bit more of Hudlin, but only as an impromptu blungeoning weapon. š
We will definitely hear more about what has driven these ogres to a killing frenzy.
Iām guessing that snow makes them band together to attack others.
Did the snow bring the monsters or did the monsters bring the snow?
At first, I didn’t like the snow effects in the panels during the fight, because it makes it hard to tell what’s going on. But on reflection, I think that’s the whole point: the sudden fight in the middle of a snowstorm IS confusing and chaotic, and the snow and blurring convey that, with the ogres blending into the snow and the trees. And the last panel is certainly clear enough. Poor Hudlin! Thanks for the page.
(Also, I heartily approve of Maeye’s sartorial choice.)
I felt the exact same way when I was putting the page together. The snow makes it very difficult to see what is happening and covers up most of my hard work, but yes, that is the point. Confusion and chaos ensue and thus our band is separated.
Is it a localized snowstorm? If so, then it makes sense that the low angled, direct sunlight hitting the flakes and clusters of snow would make them bright and distracting.
If the whole sky were overcast, then I imagine the snow would look grayer and less opaque… much like the motion effect makes it look in the last panel. Of course, that’d make the sudden start of the snowfall less obvious.
All in all, I like the way the page is. I, too, felt the increased panic caused by the reduced visibility.
If you ever make changes to the art on the page, my only recommendation would be to zoom in more on Hudlin’s horse’s head, so we can see the reflection in its eye better. As long as we can still see the stripe on its forehead and at least part of the ear, it should still be pretty easy to tell it’s a horse. It’s not really necessary to see much of the cheek. If you moved the sound effect up and to the left, then the larger eye being closer to the right side would be okay, because the lettering would draw focus to the eye. (I have no idea why I went on so long about a 3 year old page. I guess it’s just that awesome!) š
Poor Hudlin, though… :'( I hope he at least gets laid… to rest. x.x
A few possible dialog changes to consider, when you prepare this page for a book-
1st panel: Maybe add a comma after “having you all along”, for readability?
4th: “whose mare”
5th: “amount of heat”
6th: “take it into me”
Also, in a couple of places “it’s” would seem more natural than “it is”
It’s a smart move to split the convoy. The caravan going right and Maeye going left so the ogres will also need to go separate. Or are they going both to Maeye or caravan ? I hope not because only one ogre is bad enough and two are a disaster.
I feel sorry for the traumatic painful death of Hudlin.
Splitting up will not be by choice, but by a result of being blinded by snow and fear. We will have to see how things ensue to find out whether or not splitting up ends up being good or bad. š
Did you guys think the close upshot on the horse and the reflection in its eye worked?
Didn’t see a reflection in horses eye… and… still don’t… at least in this resolution available here…
but i see the idea – nice…
Yea. I was afraid of that. Even in the full rez version you cannot really see it. Need room for one more panel, I guess. Should have gone nine rows, but once I cross that line, there’s no turning back and then I gotta make every page nine rows….
Yeah, I didn’t see a reflection either – I figured you were just showing how frightened the horses are.
Well that works, too. The idea was Hudlin’s horse bolted and then the wagon crew follows him all in a panic.
Can kinda see that there is something reflected, but not what (unless it’s one of ogres)
Immune to cold and absorbs magic through bare skin?
Well, that is an awesome development, from our perspective. š
Fortunately, it seems to suit her as well!
Yea, Maeye likes to dress skimpy and sexy so now she can in any environment. š
Miss a couple days, and you go and get a side-character eaten š
Yea. I think we have enough side characters. And I’d like to bring back some old favorites like Gus and Ryder, so chomp chomp goes Hudlin. He wasn’t even supposed to have this big a part. Originally, I had him getting killed off by the bees, but he somehow survived. Sneaky little bastards, these side characters. You never know what they are going to get up to.
A) D&D advice to all newbies. Never split the party.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUMCIn2swTU
B) Nice rationalization for Maeye being semi-clad most of the time from here on in. ::snicker::
That was funny!
Yea. Maeye likes to show some skin. š
Wait, did they leave Aray behind? Did she fall out in panel 15? o_O
I don’t think so. You can see that she get up just before the first ogre came but when the second ogre attacked Hudlin and the horses started to run she fell back down on the caravan. If she did fall out then the ogres would first get her before the rest and in the last panel I don’t see Aray in the hands of them.
Depends if they noticed she fell out: snow-coverage works both ways
That’s right, the snow works like a smoke grenade. We will see on the next page.
The change of festival outfit for the vote incentive is fantastic. The underbust corset top and socks have such great texture. They accentuate Aray’s body perfectly. The sugar skull face paint is so detailed. The lines and designs create a great deal of mystery and mischief in Aray’s eyes.
I also noticed that Aray has a new piercing! Is this just for the festival outfit?!
Was wondering if that piercing was new, or if simply hadn’t been as observant š
Did notice she has cute ribbons in her twin braids š
Totally want those boots!
The ribbons were cute. And I am with you on the boots! š
Aray has a thing for boots. We will learn more about that soon. š
I am glad you liked it! The new piercing is a possible future addition. We will have to see!