Now to be critical. Maeye’s dialogue here comes off to me as way too horny frat boy, especially with Arayanna standing right next to her. I know she’s outspoken, but this seems very out of character to me. Last panel is just solid gold, though!
Hm. This [i]is[/i] a spike in horny-fratboy-ness from Mae, but I read that as her deliberately giving Aray a hard time, as the other half of her response to panel 2.
If I did read it correctly, perhaps a grumble added to panel 3 or panel 4 would increase clarity? Of course, for those reading the archive afterward, an impending page could provide clarity by having Mae promptly drop it once Aray isn’t right next to her, or having Aray comment on it and Mae communicate it in a healthier manner.
Horny-sorority-girl sounds about right, but don’t believe she is doing it to ‘wind up’ Aray, specially seeing how they are still dancing around the issue of ‘is she really flirting back with me?’
Maeye has a strong drunken fratboy streak in her. It’s an occupational hazard. She’s a natural flirt and does not have a very good internal censor. Aray on the other hand is conservation and proper – also an occupational hazard, although not one we have mentioned yet. So yea, we are going to have some fun this chapter with these clashing personalities.
And yes, unfortunately, Maeye is wasting good whiskey there. Capturing a recent event that happened to me in real life. And I was the punch-line-deliverer and subsequent whiskey-spit victim, not the spitter.
That would have been an interesting twist. Maeye spits out her bourbon, hits a candle, sets Bekha on fire, Bekhra runs around screaming catching the rest of the place on fire, inn burns down, Maeye and Aray sneak away in the darkness. LOL.
I couldn’t quite figure out what you meant until I went back and checked the panel in question…
So, “find an inn” (not “and”). Nice catch – I hadn’t noticed the typo, and normally those leap out at me.
Thanks for the catch. I really should go back and fix these, but I am just too damned lazy…or busy…or both.
I might fix this one because the text of Aray’s last night being off center from the speech bubble is driving me nuts. So if I gotta fix that, might as well fix the typo, too.
Aray and Maeye have not become romantically involved yet. They certainly have strong feelings for each other and are definitely feeling that fascinating and somewhat rare sensation of instantaneous and overpowering physical attraction to each other, but their feelings have not yet been expressed verbally or physically. They have been close a couple of times, but no fireworks just yet.
And now they have some problems they need to deal with. Like Maeye’s flirtatious personality, their 230 year age difference, and the fact that Aray is nearly immortal and Maeye is not. These problems will get some focus in this chapter.
New page, YAY!
Now to be critical. Maeye’s dialogue here comes off to me as way too horny frat boy, especially with Arayanna standing right next to her. I know she’s outspoken, but this seems very out of character to me. Last panel is just solid gold, though!
Hm. This [i]is[/i] a spike in horny-fratboy-ness from Mae, but I read that as her deliberately giving Aray a hard time, as the other half of her response to panel 2.
If I did read it correctly, perhaps a grumble added to panel 3 or panel 4 would increase clarity? Of course, for those reading the archive afterward, an impending page could provide clarity by having Mae promptly drop it once Aray isn’t right next to her, or having Aray comment on it and Mae communicate it in a healthier manner.
Horny-sorority-girl sounds about right, but don’t believe she is doing it to ‘wind up’ Aray, specially seeing how they are still dancing around the issue of ‘is she really flirting back with me?’
>> they are still dancing around the issue of ‘is she really flirting back with me?’<<
Are they? Hmm, I had assumed they had gotten past that stage and were physically involved. Did I err?
I sure thought they’d gotten those answers during the fast-forward, given the tone shift in their conversation… But it’s not explicit, so maybe not?
Maeye has a strong drunken fratboy streak in her. It’s an occupational hazard. She’s a natural flirt and does not have a very good internal censor. Aray on the other hand is conservation and proper – also an occupational hazard, although not one we have mentioned yet. So yea, we are going to have some fun this chapter with these clashing personalities.
Oh, okay. Well, as long as it’s intentional and you have an endgame in mind, here’s my nickel (vote) for the ride! 😀
At least there is no naked candle flame nearby in panel 15 😀
I took that as more of an intentional “raspberry” than a whiskey spraying choke. Just Mae bein’ her somewhat immature self. 😛
And yes, unfortunately, Maeye is wasting good whiskey there. Capturing a recent event that happened to me in real life. And I was the punch-line-deliverer and subsequent whiskey-spit victim, not the spitter.
Well, typically ‘raspberry’s involve tongue 😛
That would have been an interesting twist. Maeye spits out her bourbon, hits a candle, sets Bekha on fire, Bekhra runs around screaming catching the rest of the place on fire, inn burns down, Maeye and Aray sneak away in the darkness. LOL.
“This place…is cursed!” https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TGJhxJcSGZA
LOL!! That is awesome! Thank you!!
Just fyi, thrid panel it should be “an, not “and”. Love the comic.
I couldn’t quite figure out what you meant until I went back and checked the panel in question…
So, “find an inn” (not “and”). Nice catch – I hadn’t noticed the typo, and normally those leap out at me.
Damn you, editor!!!!!!!!!
Thanks for the catch. I really should go back and fix these, but I am just too damned lazy…or busy…or both.
I might fix this one because the text of Aray’s last night being off center from the speech bubble is driving me nuts. So if I gotta fix that, might as well fix the typo, too.
*Third. Lol. Typos.
Engiha: “Bekha, dear, how many times have I told you: don’t tell them about the curse until they have giving us some money!” 🙁
LOL!
Loving the look the horse is giving Maeye in panel three: “Don’t look at me! That smell is not ground level!!”
Haha! Yes! Exactly!
Aray in the last panel: “Aaaaand there it is.”
Exactly! It makes me so happy when you guys get what I am trying to portray through their expressions.
There is a grammar mistake in panel 3.
Not a grammar mistake, spelling error
The fog above the horses head looks like a sneering skull. 🙂
That skull is awesome! Thank you for pointing that out. Wish I could claim I did that on purpose. 🙂
All the details you put inside of the inn add charm and character. I notice new things every time I come back to this page!
Thank you. I spent a silly amount of time putting that together. I am glad you are enjoying it.
” they are still dancing around the issue of ‘is she really flirting back with me?’”
Are they? Hmm, I had assumed they had gotten past that and were physically involved. Did I err?
Aray and Maeye have not become romantically involved yet. They certainly have strong feelings for each other and are definitely feeling that fascinating and somewhat rare sensation of instantaneous and overpowering physical attraction to each other, but their feelings have not yet been expressed verbally or physically. They have been close a couple of times, but no fireworks just yet.
And now they have some problems they need to deal with. Like Maeye’s flirtatious personality, their 230 year age difference, and the fact that Aray is nearly immortal and Maeye is not. These problems will get some focus in this chapter.